Going on this vacation to Paris, France, is my dream come true. For as long as I can remember, I have wanted to see the Eiffel Tower. Also, I would love to visit the museums. If there is time, it could also be fun to dine in the cafes.
A few issues...at the end,the last sentence, you use a passive perspective, where as the rest is more assertive...you should keep it one or the other. Your 3rd sentence has a future tense sound whereas the rest is present tense...make sure that is also present tense
