The original piece:
The outlook wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day:
The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play,
And then when Cooney died at first, Barrows did the same,
A pall-like silence fell upon the patrons of the game
My paraphrased piece:
The viewpoint wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day: The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play, And at that point when Cooney passed on at to begin with, Pushcarts did the same, A pall-like hush fell upon the benefactors of the diversion
or
The point of view wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day: the score was four to two, with just one more inning to go, and at that point when Cooney moved on to begin with, Pushcarts did the same, A pale-like hush descended on the diversion benefactors.
i tried-
