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It was a cold, windy December afternoon. A man was sitting outside a local gas station with his cardboard sign that read “Homeless. Anything Helps. God Bless.” At the bottom, it was signed, “Jim.” It was starting to snow and he only had his T-shirt, sweat pants, and an old worn out hoodie.



Just before he was about to pack up and head to a McDonalds to stay warm and maybe get some food from the One Dollar Menu, a woman pulled up in a White CRV. She was dressed nicely with her hair in a ponytail. She handed Jim a care package and quickly drove off, before Jim could even say thank you to the kind lady. He slowly packed up his stuff and figured he would open his care package once he got to McDonalds as the snow was starting to pick up falling more quickly and heavily. When Jim arrived at Mcdonalds he was greeted by the cashiers behind the registers in their black and yellow uniforms. He was a frequent visitor to this particular McDonalds and they were always happy to see him. He set down his belongings and decided to open his care package before ordering any food. The contents were nicely packaged in a bag with a big red bow on top.